The tables show the transformation that have taken area at Queen Mary Hospital since it is construction in 1960.

The tables show the transformation that have taken area at Queen Mary Hospital since it is

construction

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in 1960. The maps

shows

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developments which took

placed

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place

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main

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the main

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road. There

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are

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three time zones with four changes in place:1960,1980,2000 years.

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1960

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the area nearly located at road

have

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4 places.They are

hospital

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a hospital

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,shopping

center

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,car park and farmland,they

are have

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the

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same shape of form,

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furthermore

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the farmland

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a little big form compared with other. In 1980 had a lot of changes like

create

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a new block for nursing

school

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.So we have

cancer

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a cancer

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centre

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,pharmacy,hospital,nursing

school

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and car park.

Pharmacy

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join to hospital block,

therefore

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shopping

centre

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was closed and opened cancer

centre

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In 2000

map

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received total changes.

Cancer

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The cancer

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centre

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centres

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join a location from

nursing

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the nursing

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school

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,and

nursing

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the nursing

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school

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schools

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divided place with

car

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a car

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park,they

are have

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the same territory.

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comparison of the three maps reveals a change from 4 blocks to 5 blocks.

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Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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152 words

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Many claim that the fast food industry had a negative effect on evironment, eating habit and families. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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