Some people think crimes are the result of circumstances like poverty and other social problems. Others believe that they are caused by people who are bad in nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In today's era, the rich are getting richer and the poor are getting poorer. Some people believe, situations like unemployment and social problems have led to poverty,
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others stand with the view that the bad nature of individuals has resulted in
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a situation. In recent years, the
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rate has spiked tremendously. Some crimes have been committed
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economic reasons
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other reasons for theft may be because of their wants. Nowadays, every individual wants a luxurious life making the poor feel even more poor. A recent study has revealed that most thefts and crimes occur
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socioeconomic factors.
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, in the USA, the
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rate has spiked from 10% to 55% in the past couple of years.
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the General Counsel Of the USA, the majority of crimes occur
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of wanting to enjoy basic comforts.
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,no individual is born a bad-natured person. Unfortunate situations make them helpless
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, they end up taking the wrong path. The world is growing at a fast pace , and it has its own pros and cons.
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to poverty, hate has
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been seen as a major reason for an increase in
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. Recently, the world has seen a lot of
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hate.
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, the attack on Trayvon Martin In Minnesota, Chicago was recorded as a hate killing.Despite
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gaining world attention, criminal rates have not seen a decline since 2011. To sum it all up, I conclude,
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occurs
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adverse situations like poverty and unemployment. In the vicious circle of life, where everyone wants their needs to be fulfilled find the short-cut method to fulfil them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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