In many countries, people now wear western clothes as suits and jeans rather than traditional clothing. Why is this case? Is this positive or negative development?

Nowadays, traditional
outfits
have disappeared in a race of new
western
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designs. Because of
ongoing
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trend in youngsters in adopting different cultures. It seems to me that,
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of traditional and
western
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wear should be balanced without missing any optimal opportunity.
To begin
with,
current
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generation of people are moving straight forward to try
latest
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the latest
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exotic clothes, whether it is with
combination
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a combination
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casual style or with
suit
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a suit
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, jeans and
coat
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a coat
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.
However
,
this
development
had
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affected
market
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the market
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of traditional
outfits
, and so with
significant
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decline in sales of
local
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the local
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and historical
pattern
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patterns
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.
In addition
, youth in India has
also
been adopting fresh clothing collection which was brought from
western
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culture. But
this
evolution will not only impact
on
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our own historical background but
also
reflect a new perspective of ourselves.
For example
, western clothing will
shows
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us
new
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a new
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persona, but we are
also
causing our traditional dress a burden. So upcoming generation could be the case of
this
argument.
On the other hand
, if we compare our own
outfits
to
westerns
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, which would reflect major
differentiate
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differences
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between
two
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the two
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culture
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cultures
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. Where kurta, sari and pagdi are
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the perspective
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perspective
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perspectives
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of regular clothing
style
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styles
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in India,
whereas
jeans,
suit
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suits
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,
cap
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caps
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and coat have
also
consider
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considered
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common to wear regularly in other societies.
For instance
,
this
development could be both positive and negative, yet
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balanced
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balance
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between
this
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two should be
crucial
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a crucial
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option to connect our roots to other
culture
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cultures
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. To illustrate
to
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this
, foreigners visit our country to adopt our literature, like how we live and wear
according to
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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.
Similarly
, they
also
get amazed by our different patterns and styles in our local
outfits
same as when we try
their
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them
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. In conclusion, dressing
is now consider
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is now considered
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as
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important personality, yet people would judge
individual
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individuals
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by what they are wearing. In my opinion,
importance
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the importance
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to
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of
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traditional clothing should
be prioritise
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first,
but maintaining
balance
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a balance
the balance
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between
two
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the two
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styles is
also
pivotal for our character.
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