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Today, many people do not know their neighbours. Why is this? what can be done about this?

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Nowadays,
people
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 do not prefer to meet new
people
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, especially those
live
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who live
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their
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 door. In
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 essay, I will explain why
this
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 situation happens and what kinds of leisure activities can be done to create a bridge between neighbours.
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 with, social media ( including Twitter, Facebook, and Instagram) has gradually caught on all over the world.
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expanding
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 in social platforms accounts for losing close ties between humans and a lack of communication skills.
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,
people
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 might not know their neighbours or new male or female friends.
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, some
last
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 research point out that
people
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 who live in a cosmopolitan city run into their neighbours twice a day,
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; they would not like to initiate a conversation with them.
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 to
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 behaviour, they suffer from loneliness in their routine life.
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, scientists believe that social media has a huge effect on
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 outcome. There are plenty of ways to escape from virtual communities and built new networks with real
people
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.
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, there is global hunger in the world. To deal with
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 dreadful problem,
people
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 who settle down in the same territory may make
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charity work to help innocent and vulnerable kids. Holding other
people
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’s hands stimulates to increase the connection of
neighbors
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neighbours
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 emotionally and
give
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gives
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 them an opportunity to abstain from being alone. In conclusion, the internet has a magnificent
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 on the socialisation talents of
human
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humans
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, mostly negatively. Hopefully,
people
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 can take
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action to reduce the side effects of social media on their life as a volunteer in a team event.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • neighbourhood bonds
  • social media connectivity
  • urban lifestyle
  • online relationships
  • fast-paced society
  • privacy concerns
  • communal relations
  • individualism
  • transient societies
  • expatriates
  • cultural shift
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