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Today, many people do not know their neighbours. Why is this? what can be done about this?

#people #neighbours
Nowadays,
people
 do not prefer to meet new
people
, especially those
live
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 next
their
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 door. In
this
 essay, I will explain why
this
 situation happens and what kinds of leisure activities can be done to create a bridge between neighbours.
To begin
 with, social media ( including Twitter, Facebook, and Instagram) has gradually caught on all over the world.
This
expanding
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 in social platforms accounts for losing close ties between humans and a lack of communication skills.
Therefore
,
people
 might not know their neighbours or new male or female friends.
For example
, some
last
 research point out that
people
 who live in a cosmopolitan city run into their neighbours twice a day,
however
; they would not like to initiate a conversation with them.
In contrast
 to
this
 behaviour, they suffer from loneliness in their routine life.
Additionally
, scientists believe that social media has a huge effect on
this
 outcome. There are plenty of ways to escape from virtual communities and built new networks with real
people
.
For instance
, there is global hunger in the world. To deal with
this
 dreadful problem,
people
 who settle down in the same territory may make
a
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charity work to help innocent and vulnerable kids. Holding other
people
’s hands stimulates to increase the connection of
neighbors
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neighbours
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 emotionally and
give
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gives
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 them an opportunity to abstain from being alone. In conclusion, the internet has a magnificent
impacts
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impact
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 on the socialisation talents of
human
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humans
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, mostly negatively. Hopefully,
people
 can take
an
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action to reduce the side effects of social media on their life as a volunteer in a team event.
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