The table below gives information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009.

The table below gives information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009.
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The table compares
between
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the different
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wings
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legs
of
tutors
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in both secondary and high school throughout the period of 2009.
overall
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it is clear that
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tutors
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in Luxembourg earn the highest
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compared with the other countries.
while
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Australia they have the lowest salaries among the other countries. Luxembourg's teachers
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started their work in teaching with 80000
thousand
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annually.
Then
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their
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experienced a
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increase
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by
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119000
thousand
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after 15
years
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of working. after 30
years
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they reached the maximum
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around
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132000
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. The second highest
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for teachers was for Denmark
tutors
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which
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accounted
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450000
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in the beginning.
then
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it increased slightly around 10 percent after 15
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working
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. after 8
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their
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remains stable without any changes.
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Japan
and
Korea
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Korean
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teacher's
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salary
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were approximately close in the starting period around 34000 and 30000 and after 37
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Japan reached the top
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which accounted for 86000
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, Korea's tutor
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increased more than
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double
around
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62000 after 34
years
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. Australia's
tutors
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were the lowest
tutors
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have
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salary
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in the starting and the
ending
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which accounted
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28000 and 48000 after 9
years
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words tutors, thousand, salary, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondary/high school teachers
  • annual salary
  • gross income
  • net salary
  • cost of living
  • education funding
  • gender pay gap
  • teaching hours
  • years of experience
  • additional qualifications
  • economic indicators
  • average wage
  • currency conversion
  • educational disparities
  • international comparison
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