The diagram below shows how orange juice is produced.
The diagram illustrates several steps of how the production of orange juice is carried out.
It is clear that
there are various main stages in this
process, beginning with transferring fresh oranges to the factory and ending with the resulting juices being sold in the supermarkets.
As can be seen, during the first stage, fresh fruits are taken to the factory by lorries and washed by a washing machine to eliminate all the dirt outside. Next,
the extraction process is conducted as the fruits are squeezed, the received extract is mixed with water to become juice and the solid waste is saved for animal feed. Orange juice is then
packaged immediately and transported to the supermarkets for sale. Otherwise
, it undergoes other different procedures.
Once the extracted liquid is collected, it is brought to an evaporator machine to remove all the left water. Subsequently
, it is stored in cans and conveyed to the warehouse in order to be combined with water again. Finally
, the finished products are packaged and delivered to supermarkets by trucks.Submitted by danphamngocha on
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