Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What are the reasons of this? What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions.

Nowadays, Global warming has become one of the biggest threats
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human
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,
moreover
the rapid rising of sea levels at alarming rates.
This
essay will try to identify the factors contributing to
this
, explain some of the issues associated with
this
, and
also
some possible solutions regarding
this
matter. There are several reasons contributing to global warming. First and foremost,
deforestation
. Each year, there are many cases regarding
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deforestation
for commercial profit. As an example,
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forest
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burning method.
As a result
, it could increase the average
temperature
in the area
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and
may be
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more if the area that
infected
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are vast.
Secondly
, the gas emission
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vehicle’s
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fuel could
also
become the reason
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global warming, because it could
also
damage the air, soil, and water qualities.
Vehicle’s
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fuel contains Carbon Dioxide and
other pollutant
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another pollutant
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that each of them
have
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ability
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to trap different heat.
According to
that, there are some problems associated with global warming.
First,
the earth’s
temperature
increased
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cause
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the polar ice’s melted so the sea levels increased.
Secondly
, an extreme climate change in many parts of the earth. Turning to possible solutions, probably the most effective measure is do not
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deforestation
,
instead
doing reforestation, because
plant
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can absorb Carbon Dioxide as a part of photosynthesis.
Secondly
, use electrical energy moderately, and do not burn
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garbage to prevent the rising of
temperature
in that area.
To conclude
, the problems are caused because of
deforestation
and gas
emission
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emissions
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of
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vehicle’s
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fuel, which led to the increasing
of
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earth’s
temperature
and extreme climate change. The solutions are doing reforestation,
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electrical energy moderately, and do not burn
the
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garbage.
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