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The graph below shows the number of complaints made about noise to Environmental Health authorities in the city of Newtown between 1980 and 1996. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of complaints made about noise to Environmental Health authorities in the city of Newtown between 1980 and 1996. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates how many people complained about four kinds of
noise
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 pollution( road works,
factories
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,
traffic
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noise
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, domestic) in the city of Newtown to Environmental Health authorities from 1980 to 1996.
Overall
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, the proportion of
complaints
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 because of the road works is the highest,
while
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 fewer citizens complained about the
noise
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 made by households.
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, the rates of
complaints
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due to
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factories
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 and
traffic
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 didn't fluctuate too much during the period. In 1980, about 500 people were not happy with the
noise
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 caused by road construction, and the figure didn't change until it experienced a slight drop in 1986,
which
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 around 400 people were annoyed by it.
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, from 1988 to 1996, the number skyrocketed to 1200
complaints
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.
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, the trend of the figure for the
complaints
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 is opposite, which about 650
complaints
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were
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received in 1980, but only 100
complaints
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 were received in 1996.  The Environmental Health authorities collected the numbers about the
complaints
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 of the
noise
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 made by
traffic
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 and
factories
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 about 300 and 400 respectively.
Factories
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 were reported the most in 1990 with about 800
complaints
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,
while
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 the number of
traffic
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noise
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complaints
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 reached its lowest point at 200.
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, they got almost the same number of
complaints
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 in 1996 (600).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words noise, factories, traffic, complaints with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 7 times.
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