scientists agree that people are damaging their health by eating too much junck food. some people think that the answer to this problem is to educate people .Others think education will not work.Discuss both views and give your opinion?
Nowadays many people eat a fast meal
instead
of healthy food while
it is a bad habit because they can get sick like cancer but they don't
pay attention to their future and they think this
is an advertisement so they don't
make lunch or dinner because they don't
have time management and waste their time so they can cook and then
they will get junk snacks. Many organizations try to find a way to it
teach everything about health, healthy feed, junk bread and, desires. so they achieved a lot of ways that Correct pronoun usage
apply
illustrated
junk meat is bad for your health. One of the first ways is to educate the public Wrong verb form
illustrate
while
other groups think this
way isn't
correct. The first group thinks if society knows everything about their daily diet
and they understand the positive point about eating a healthy snack like milk, meat, vegetable
, yoghurt, water etc, they Fix the agreement mistake
vegetables
encourage
to eat a healthy meal Wrong verb form
are encouraged
while
there are plenty of factors that a person decides to change their diet
. For example
, if the population know the effect of diet
on their healthy
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health
while
they don't
have enough many don't
have a way to exchange their life then
they follow their life the same as past. second-team
thinks that education isn'Correct your spelling
second
t
enough motivation to people try to alter their daily diet
. they believe there are many reasons that government
should handle them until the crowd can change their Correct article usage
the government
diet
and eat healthy food. For example
, if government
handle the prices of meat, dairy, beans, vegetable etc and try to reduce them until the people's purchasing power Correct article usage
the government
will increase
and they can eat them Wrong verb form
increases
then
they can receive protein and vitamins etc as a result
, society has a healthy community. In conclusion, I disagree with them because both of them are important. the community will know anything education about healthy diet
and they know how they can increase their life span and the government should support the population in prices of products until the crowd can make a good decision about diet
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