Machines have replaced physical work in many industries. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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and it has entirely replaced workers in some industries. For
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due can improve efficiencies and
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nowadays. For
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agreement the first idea, meaning
machines
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outweigh the drawbacks. On the one hand,
machines
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is a great way to
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goods
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machines
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all-day
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unless employers
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a regular checks
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for these materials, it takes a huge progress in
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process.
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prices
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decrease if factories adopted
machines
into their processes. The realizable reason is that the number of goods will influence the evaluation
prices
by market, and
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more
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entry will
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a good discount for
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the process efficiency and provides
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for human being.
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of
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employment,
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opportunities
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replaced in factories.
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, in many countries, most people tend to have a job in factories, the reason is that kinds of
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more percentage of
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workforces
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. Based on
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in the workplace, it will
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most of
employees
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highly likely will lose their jobs.
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also
have other chances to make workers find a new job.
Furthermore
, the
machines
are
also
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replace human doing some particular
work
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my view that there
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tons of bright things if
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machines
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essential
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industries, it will
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to more goods
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and
customers
will get
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use
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lower
prices
.
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, these situations
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human employment challenges.
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