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Nowadays many people read the news online instead of reading newspapers or watching TV. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

#people #news #newspapers #tv #trend
The need to
access
to
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easily and quickly
information
 has become essential nowadays.
People
 have begun to read more and more
news
 online, replacing traditional channels.
Nevertheless
, whether the trend of consuming online
information
 would be advantageous or disadvantageous has been widely discussed. I absolutely believe that
this
 change will be more advantageous. Nowadays, digitization has become an essential part of our lives and changed our habits and
behavior
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.
People
 have started to prefer web
media
, because
this
media
 has delivered
news
 faster across a variety of platforms, even for free, and in many different languages,
therefore
people
 could have
access
 to instantaneous
information
 in different devices that they frequently use. To illustrate, mobile phone is the devices that we use every day at every moment. If we need to search for
information
 in seconds, we can get it and all the topics we want without restriction. Meanwhile, traditional channels have not adapted to the new times, maintaining their old and few interactive formats, losing customers who are moving to multimedia options. Another relevant benefit to consider is the free cost that the
news
 online
bring
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.
People
 can
access
 a variety of
information
 without limit
of
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 views and in the moment they prefer.
On the other hand
, when
public
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the public
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 uses social
media
 to read
news
, they could be exposed to fake
news
 and several disinformations because not always the online
media
 have a confident source, and they can use false or alarming
news
 to reach the attention of the public and generate more ranking, publicity or views. Another aspect to consider is that the demand for immediate
information
 leads the
media
 to make mistakes. Creating
news
that is
 not well written and far from the standards to which we are accustomed.
To conclude
, reading the
news
 online can generate some problems,
nonetheless
, the benefits to
access
 to
this
 way of
information
 provide more opportunities and benefits.
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