Whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or not agree?

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success in our lives, we can not deny how lucky we have been given that were not from our efforts.
However
, it is not all the time we can stay under a tree to wait
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falling
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down at our mouths; we need to labour
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sufficiently
to get our rewards. So I do not agree tally that someone’s achievements come from
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luck. On the one hand, it is said that almost success
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from
lucky
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. Because
,
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without
lucky
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they can not gain their
achievemements
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achievements
. For
instant
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, a man has been unlabouring most of his life,
however
, one day he got the
jacpot
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jackpot
and became a
millionare
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millionaire
.
Although
he did not
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much for
ticket
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price,
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moreover
, what he received
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from what he was willing for. So without
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, we can not
amagine
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imagine
how hard his life is to feed his family and himself
withou
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without
working. On the other
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,
lucky
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only comes to people who endure constantly in working. A farmer can not wait for his
fuitful
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fruitful
faithful
harvest unless he cultivates his farm’s land and makes a plan carefully for the harvest. Combination with his labour and some
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fortunate
which
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nature brings to him
such
as
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time of
raining
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, he will get
good
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income eventually. Talents
what
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are kinds assist success for human
being
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beings
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.
For instance
, Lionel Messi, an international football player, is
example
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for
any one
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anyone
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who wants to become a
professinal
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professional
player.
While
he has been trained hard constantly,
the
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his inner talent
he
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has aided him much
for
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his
sucesseful
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successful
. In conclusion, I do not agree that
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achievements which someone
gained
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are from
fortunates
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fortunate
.
However
, with the fortuantes, human
being
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can get our targets easier. Unfortunately, we can not stay
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laziness to wait lucky come, actions and we are able to reach our goals.
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