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The bar chart below shows how frequently people in USA are in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The bar chart below shows how frequently people in USA are in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
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The data given in the chart illustrates the frequency based on fast-
food
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 consumption in the USA from 2003 to 2013.
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people
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 in the USA consume fast
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 once a week for one decade. A part of
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also
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 went to fast
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 restaurants once or twice a month.
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, only a small portion of
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 eat fast
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 every day and/or never consume it. Most residents in the USA visited fast
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 restaurants once a week in 2003, 2006, and 2013 with approximately 31, 33, and 27 per cent respectively.
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 in 2006 the percentage of once-a-week fast
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 consumption was the highest amongst all categories, most citizens began to visit fast
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 once or twice a month in 2013. Of the six categories, the frequency of
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 who ingest fast
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 every day is the smallest one, which never exceeded 5 per cent.
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, only least than 6% never consumed fast
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. In terms of stopping by fast
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 eateries several times a week and a few times a year, the percentages vary between 10% and 20%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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