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Some people consider online study better than classroom studies, while others think classroom study is better. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The world has changed after the covid-19 pandemic. Previously, the trend was inclined towards physical classrooms for both students and teachers. Since that time, colleges have started to progress virtually
due to
 poor environmental and health conditions.
Similarly
, the educational sector has
also
 imposed both mechanisms to educate people. Today, a few individuals believe that online learning has opened up a path
that is
 more impressive and beneficial. They think, through
this
, the unnecessary usage of many resources
such
 as petrol, cars and electricity consumption could be managed and controlled.
However
, they ignore the fact, online teaching might not be able to provide an outstanding level of education
due to
 communication barriers. Teachers and learners might not feel comfortable discussing in a class
that is
 being recorded. In my experience, virtual lessons are not capable enough to deliver solid and accurate information
due to
 limited and unstable internet connections.
On the other hand
, the physical environment has many benefits.
Firstly
, the space is allocated for a fixed group of kids and their guide would be capable to get feedback through cross-questioning and facial expressions.
Moreover
, the teacher would easily use a whiteboard to explain problems in run-time.
Furthermore
, the admission would
also
 feel motivated and eager to increase their knowledge
due to
 the class competition. Engaging people in one area is much easier than doing it virtually. From my knowledge and experience, I am in favour of local educational rooms because recruitment would not feel lazy and the instructor could work on their different aspects rather than delivering the course work.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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