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The table below shows statistics about the top five countries for international tourism in 2012 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows statistics about the top five countries for international tourism in 2012 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table compares the
number
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 of global
tourists
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 and their spending in the top five countries in 2012 and 2013. It is notable that France attracted the most
visitors
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 in both 2012 and 2013,
while
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 Italy was the least visited
country
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 among the five. The USA,
on the other hand
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, earned the highest revenue from international
tourists
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 in both years. In 2012, France welcomed 83
million
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 global
tourists
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, making it the most popular destination. The USA followed as the second most visited
country
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 with 66.7
million
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visitors
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. Spain and
China
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 ranked third and fourth in terms of international
visitors
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, each with under 58
million
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tourists
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. Meanwhile, Italy was the least popular choice, attracting only 46.4
million
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tourists
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. In 2013, there was a slight increase in the
number
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 of
tourists
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 in each
country
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, except for
China
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, where the
number
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 of
visitors
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 fell from 57.7
million
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 to 55.7
million
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. Regarding income from international tourism, the USA earned a substantial $126.2
billion
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 in 2012, which was over double the figure of any other
country
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 in the table. Spain received the second-highest income at $56.3
billion
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 in the same year, followed by France with $53.6
billion
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,
China
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 with $50
billion
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, and Italy with $41.2
billion
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. In 2013,
although
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 each
country
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 saw an increase in tourist spending, the ranking of revenue from international tourism remained the same. Interestingly, despite a decrease in the
number
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 of
visitors
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,
China
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's revenue from international travellers increased to $51.7
billion
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 in 2013.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, tourists, visitors, country, million, china, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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