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The table below gives information about rail transport in four contries in 2007.

The table below gives information about rail transport in four contries in 2007.
The provided table illustrates statistical information concerning
passengers
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, moving distance and
cargo
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 using rail transport in
UK
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the UK
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,
USA
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, Japan and Italy in 2007. As can be seen from the table, the
number
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 of
passengers
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 in Japan and the weight of
cargo
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 in
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USA
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the USA
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 are the biggest of the four countries. In Japan, the
number
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 of rail transport guests is 27, which is 90 times of
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USA
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the USA
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.
Likewise
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,
passengers
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' moving distance per head of population is 1,980 kilometres, which is over 20 times of
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USA
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the USA
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.
On the other hand
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, the weight of
cargo
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 carried is 23.01 billion tons, which is only a hundredth of
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USA
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the USA
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. In
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USA
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the USA
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, the
number
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 of
passengers
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 is the lowest.
Furthermore
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, the moving distance of
passengers
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 is the shortest of the given counties. The figures in UK and Italy, meanwhile, are roughly similar. The gap in the
number
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 of
passengers
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 between the two counties is only 0.4.
In addition
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, the differential in the tons of
cargo
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 carried is only 0.3 billion.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words passengers, cargo, usa, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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