Whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or not agree? You should write at least 254 words.
Whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly
by
a question of Change preposition
apply
luck
. To what extent do you agree or not agree? however
, several individuals believe that their fulfillments
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fulfillment
based
on their good Add a missing verb
is based
luck
, I totally disagree with that notion as the person
attempts and efforts Change noun form
person's
the
major reason for their accomplishments.
on Add a missing verb
are the
one
hand, enormous people Correct article usage
the one
are believe
the word of Change the verb form
believe
luck
. since they grew up with parents who are learned
them that the future will come by Change the verb form
have learned
luck
. so, the person
shouldn't give attention for
any upcoming plans. becauseChange preposition
to
,
your Remove the comma
apply
luck
will manage it by the way. I
is really Correct pronoun usage
It
totally
wrong Correct article usage
a totally
notions
and the Fix the agreement mistake
notion
person
should eliminate that luck
draws the person
future.
on the other hand
, I totally believe that the humans
efforts itself the main Fix the agreement mistake
human
are
the main reason for achieving dreams. because when the Change the verb form
is
person
tries to improve his self
by learning new skills and Correct your spelling
himself
work
hard for many hours. definitely, he will be Wrong verb form
working
reward
. after Wrong verb form
rewarded
that
he may get a good opportunity which can allow him to achieve his aims. Add a comma
,that
furthermore
the persons who Add a comma
,furthermore
are
worked and educated extremely are never Unnecessary verb
apply
equally
Change the word
equal
with
the persons who thought that their Change preposition
to
luck
will fulfill
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fulfil
the
aims. Change the word
their
for
instance
Add a comma
,instance
a
two friends of mine Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
one
of them had been
Unnecessary verb
apply
studied
for 18 years to Wrong verb form
studying
engaged
Wrong verb form
engage
the
Change preposition
in the
medicine
university which he dreamed Replace the word
medical
with
and the other Change preposition
of
one
he
relied on his thoughts that his Correct pronoun usage
apply
luck
will draw him a
good future. so Change preposition
to a
that
he Correct word choice
apply
had
decided to study at all. Unnecessary verb
apply
eventually
the first Add a comma
,eventually
one
began a successful doctor while
the other person
worked as waiter
in Add an article
a waiter
restaurant
which is doesn't his Add an article
the restaurant
a restaurant
aims
.
Fix the agreement mistake
aim
to conclude
, I would say that luck
is a heresy had been created by lazy people trying affecting on the
Correct article usage
apply
other
negatively to destroy Fix the agreement mistake
others
the
society.Correct article usage
apply
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Fully explain your ideas
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