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Some people think that everyone has the right to have access to university education, and that governments should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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Nowadays, especially in a knowledge-based society, the acquisition of a tertiary degree plays a vital role in finding good jobs so some people think that universal
university
education
 should be implemented,
besides
 the government should cover higher
education
tuition
 of
students
 regardless of their socio-economic backgrounds. In my opinion, I believe that these changes can bring a number of advantages ;
however
, their drawbacks are more significant. It is acknowledged that the availability of tertiary
education
 without
tuition
 fees can have several positive impacts on individuals and society.
This
 is because thanks to
such
education
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 available, more people have the opportunity to
study
 specialized knowledge,
thus
 they probably enhance their lives with a tertiary degree to get a job with a high salary and it
also
contributesto
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contributes to
contribute to
a more educated workforce
to
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 countries.
Moreover
, the provision of free-of-charge
education
 could create a balanced opportunity for all
students
, especially for poor
students
 who cannot afford to
study
 at
university
due to
 prohibitively expensive
tuition
 fees.
As a result
, these changes may improve the country's economy and bridge the gap between the rich and the poor.
However
,
this
 line of reasoning is flawed because of the long-term dire consequence on the country’s development of these changes. To be specific, everyone entitled to
university
 will reduce the competition among individuals so it will make them less motivated to try and improve their academic ability to pursue
university
education
.
Besides
, the free-college policy can cause
students
 who
study
 at
university
lose
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 the motivation to
study
 hard.
Consequently
, the bachelor’s degree will lose its value and even the quality of
education
 in
university
 can be affected significantly, resulting in a reduction in the ability of the workforce which has a key role in the development of a country .
In addition
, the part of the budget allocated to other aspects
such
 as the transport system, economy and health system will be spent on
education
, leading to tax hikes and social welfare reduction, meaning the standard of living of residents will be affected. In conclusion, I believe that the government should not implement the availability of tertiary
education
 without
tuition
 fees because of its risks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Higher education
  • Accessibility
  • Social mobility
  • Meritocracy
  • Economic growth
  • Equality
  • Subsidize
  • Fiscal sustainability
  • Human capital
  • Incentivize
  • Underfunded
  • Tuition fees
  • Academic achievement
  • Workforce
  • Tax burden
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