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Band 7

You have received uniforms in your company that have to be worn by all employees. You are not satisfied with the uniform because it has some problems. Write a letter to your manager and in your letter consider the following points; Mention to positive points of the uniform. Clarify the problem that you have with the uniform. Suggest a solution for above mentioned problem.

I am writing to express my concern regarding the new company uniforms recently distributed
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 since they are now mandatory for all employees.
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 the uniforms look professional and reflect the company’s branding well, I have encountered some issues with their design and comfort. Not only is the material too thick for daily use, but it
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 causes discomfort, especially in warmer conditions.
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, the trousers are quite tight and do not allow ease of movement during work.
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, several colleagues have reported similar discomfort.
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, there appears to be a lack of appropriate sizes for many staff members. Rather than continuing with the current design, I would suggest switching to a more breathable and flexible fabric,
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 size variety.
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 the goal was to promote a unified appearance, the uniform in its current form is impractical. I kindly request
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 matter be reviewed. Thank you for your attention. Yours faithfully, Lisa

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Make sure to describe the positive points more clearly and in greater detail.
coherence and cohesion
Try to group your ideas more clearly to improve flow. You could use clearer transitions.
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The letter is polite and shows respect for the manager.
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You provided clear problems and a suggestion for improvement.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • uniform
  • professionalism
  • branding
  • comfort
  • fit
  • fabric quality
  • practicality
  • feedback
  • sizing
  • wear-test
  • alternative options
  • performance
  • concerns
  • appreciate
  • employees
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