The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph display about the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the U.S. From 1995 to 1999.
Firstly
, the
expenses
of the Satellite
was
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less than 80000 in 2004,
then
in 2006 it was around 80000, in 2008 it was more than 80000,
2010
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in 2010
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it was nearly 100000,
2012
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in 2012
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was
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around 100000, 2014
it
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was between 80000 to 120000.
Secondly
, the
expenses
of cable were more than 80000 in 2004, in 2006 it was around 90000, in 2008 it was less than 120000, in 2010 it was between 80000 to 120000, in 2012 it was low compared to 2010 with
nearby
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nearly
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80000, 2014 it was nearly 70000.
Thirdly
, the
expenses
of the internet were increasing from 2004 to 2014. In 2004 it was nearly 10000, in 2006 it was around 40000, in 2008 it was 60000, in 2010 it was near
by
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120000, in 2012 it was more than 120000 and in 2014 it was less than 200000. In the broadcast
expenses
, in
the
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2004 it was less than 80000, in 2006 it was around 80000, in 2008 it was between 80000 to 120000, in 2010 it was
near by
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nearby
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100000, 2012 it was more than 80000 and in 2014 it was 120000. In conclusion, in
above
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the above
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information data is given from 2004 to 2014.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenses with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Households
  • Technology adoption
  • Growth rate
  • Decline rate
  • Milestones
  • Obsolete
  • Societal factors
  • Economic conditions
  • Advancements
  • Consumer preferences
  • Market saturation
  • Trend analysis
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