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Nowadays, more and more people are moving from the countryside to cities, which are becoming overcrowded. What are the reasons for this movement to cities and what can be done to reduce it?

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Nowadays, more and more
people
 are moving from the
countryside
 to
cities
, which are becoming overcrowded
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 becoming more widespread in many parts of the world .
This
 essay will examine the causes and
and
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solutions
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 be taken to improve the situation. There are a variety of different causes for
this
 matter.
To begin
 with, compared to the
countryside
, the
city
 is growing more and more. Many
people
 in the
countryside
 tend to move to the
city
 for easy career development. In
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the city
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city
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people
 will have
higher-income
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 than
the
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countryside
. Ho Chi Minh
city
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City
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 is home to large and small businesses,
developing
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 economy,
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 makes Ho Chi Minh
city
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 the place with
highest
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the highest
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 percentage of immigrants in Vietnam,
it
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about 8 out of 10
people
 living in Ho Chi Minh
city
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 are
people
 from many
countryside
. Another contributing factor to mention is that many students are moving to the large
cities
 to
most
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 well-known prestigious universities, they apply to study in main
cities
 to achieve their desire
higher
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 education Despite
of
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these circumstances, there are various measures.
Firstly
, a simple solution would be
to
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 the government
created
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 better job opportunities and
more
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for more
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 universities
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 constructed in
a
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countryside
,
that
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this
 problem. The second measure would be for governments to encourage investing in
countryside
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the countryside
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,
that
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 will eventually offer plentiful jobs.
Finally
, propaganda to reduce the urban population explosion. In conclusion, the problem of
people
 moving from the
countryside
 to the
cities
 is unlikely to be entirely eliminated in the short term.
However
, various measures can be taken to tackle the issue to reduce the effects.
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