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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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learning new
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such
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 as English, some
people
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 believe that the main reason to master a different
language
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 is for travel and working abroad purposes. The other
believe
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 that there are other reasons why
people
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 should obtain foreign
languages
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. I personally believe that it is wrong to mention that acquiring new
languages
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 is just important for workers and
travelers
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. Learning new
languages
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 should not be limited to those as
languages
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 can bring us closer to international information.
Firs
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 of all, one of the main objectives of many
language
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 students is for studying or working abroad. Being able to communicate in other
languages
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 is essential for
people
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 who move to other
counties
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 either for
job
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a job
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 or
pursue
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 education abroad.
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, as someone who
have
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 spent most of my life in Indonesia, learning English if I want to study in the United Kingdom in order to meet the requirement and perform better in the classroom.
However
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,
this
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 trend creates public stereotypes that learning to speak and write in
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language
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 are exclusive
for
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 those
people
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. One thing
that is
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language
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languages
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 can be utilized in many ways by everyone. Having
language
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 ability can
helps
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 us in many ways as it brings us closer to many sources of information.
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, a chef can learn how to cook different dishes around the world by reading or watching from foreign sources.
This
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 means that no matter what profession you have, acquiring
new
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language
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 can help us. In conclusion, studying
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language
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 is only beneficial for travellers and international students is a common stereotype
among
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the
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society. It is important to figure out
different
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purpose
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 of
the
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languages
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 as
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 can ease our
life
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 in many ways.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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