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1.There have been many inventions in human history, such as wheels. Some people think the most important thing is the internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There have been many innovations in
mankind
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history
, namely wheels. Some individuals believe the most necessary thing is the
internet
. I totally agree with
this
 statement because
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the internet
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internet
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make
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information
 accessible
for
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to
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 all
people
 around the world, and
also
bring
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brings
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people
 together.
To begin
 with, there are several reasons why I believe the
internet
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 is the best
inventions
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invention
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 in human
history
. The primary reason
internet
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the internet
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make
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makes
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the
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apply
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information
 available for all
people
 worldwide. To
illustrates
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,
people
 in recent times have access to plenty of
information
 through
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the internet
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internet
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 on a wide range of topics namely, health, science, and
culutre
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culture
.
In contrast
, in the past
only
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the only
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 way to get
information
via
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was via
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visit
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a visit
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 library.
Therefore
, today
people
 can increase their
knowledege
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knowledge
 in
easy
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an easy
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 method via
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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, which
mean
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the internet
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internet
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make
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makes
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people
 live more
comfortable
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 than before.
Bring
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people
 together is another reason why I believe the
interent
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Internet
 is the better innovation in human
history
.
This
 is because via
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the internet
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internet
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people
 can stay in touch with loved ones regardless of geographical location.
For example
,
people
 who study or work abroad can keep in touch with their families or friends via make video call
via
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on
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 social media platforms
such
 as
,
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apply
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 Facebook, Twitter, and Snapchat. In comparison, in the past only method to stay in touch with loved ones through meet them
in-person
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in person
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.
Consequently
, I believe the
internet
 is the best innovation
changed
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that changed
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 the world in a positive way
via
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by
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 make communicate among
people
 easiest than ever.
To sum up
, I strongly believe the
internet
 is the better
innvoation
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innovation
 in
mankind
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mankind's
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history
 because it
make
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makes
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information
 available for all individuals around global, and
also
make
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makes
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the
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apply
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communication among
people
more easy
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easier
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 than before.
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