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The line graph below shows information about Potato harvest in three countries between 2005 and 2010

The line graph below shows information about Potato harvest in three countries between 2005 and 2010
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The given graph display information about potato harvest in three countries in the year
between
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2005 and 2010. The blow
data
 describes
about
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the
data
 from grapy.
Firstly
,
in
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the red
line
 have first grow very fast but
then
 it more slowly and have little growth.
Secondly
, in the green
line
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 there have been lost and lost up and down. In the green ,
line
 there is growth but
then
 it decreased and
then
 it increased.
Thirdly
, in the blue ,
line
 it was increasing slowly
slowly
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but increased. The
data
 is given about 3 potato harvesting
the
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countries between 2005 and 2010. The information is about
a
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5 years.
Hence
, the lines give
data
 about the vegetables. In conclusion, there are three lines red, green and blue. The above
data
 describe the information from grapy. The green
line
 increase
then
 decrease
then
 increase. The
line
 lines mean three countries from the world.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words data, line with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "describes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 3 times.
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