The line graph below shows information about Potato harvest in three countries between 2005 and 2010

The line graph below shows information about Potato harvest in three countries between 2005 and 2010
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The given graph display information about potato harvest in three countries in the year
between
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2005 and 2010. The blow
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describes
about
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the
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from grapy.
Firstly
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,
in
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the red
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have first grow very fast but
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it more slowly and have little growth.
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, in the green
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line
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there have been lost and lost up and down. In the green ,
line
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there is growth but
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it decreased and
then
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it increased.
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, in the blue ,
line
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it was increasing slowly
slowly
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but increased. The
data
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is given about 3 potato harvesting
the
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countries between 2005 and 2010. The information is about
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5 years.
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, the lines give
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about the vegetables. In conclusion, there are three lines red, green and blue. The above
data
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describe the information from grapy. The green
line
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increase
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decrease
then
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increase. The
line
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lines mean three countries from the world.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words data, line with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "describes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 3 times.
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