The maps illustrate the Islip town center now and how it would be changed in the future.

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the two diagrams show the city layout of Islip

town

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centre

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and how it would be changed between now and the future.

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, it is evident that

this

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city would undergo several developments

along with

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improvements to its social infrastructure which includes the construction of new buildings and roads. Before the development, the layout of Islip

town

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centre

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seems very simple and underdeveloped. The most noticeable feature of the

centre

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is the main

road

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, which runs in the east-west direction through the

centre

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of the

town

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. on

the

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both sides of the main

road

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, there are shops lined up. on the south side of shops, housings are located. By looking at the second diagram,

it is clear that

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the current city layout in planning would be completely redesigned. there is a dual carriageway, circulating around the

town

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. And

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inside of dual carriageway, there are new facilities

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as parking lots, a bus station.

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, part of the main

road

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is converted into

pedestrian

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a pedestrian

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road

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, centre, road with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changed" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

165 words

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