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Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives?

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Over the past few decades, animal testing has been fiercely debated
due to
 the ethical problems inherent in
this
 area of science.
This
 essay will explain why it cannot be justified and that alternatives need to be sought. The
people
 who believe that animal testing is necessary tend to say that there are serious benefits to humanity,
such
 as testing medicines before using them on human beings. They believe that
this
 will help to figure out the cures for many serious illnesses, which will make the world a better place for humans.
However
,
this
 is wrong for several reasons. Chief among them is the fact that animal testing is not as helpful in developing medicines as
people
 think. Medicines that work on animals do not always work on humans, and vice versa. As
such
, these trials are not just unnecessary but
also
 profoundly unhelpful.
For example
, if scientists give a mouse diabetes and
then
 try various drugs to cure the problem, they may find that there are twelve drugs that do not work on the mouse.
However
, maybe one of those drugs would have worked on a human. As
such
, animal testing would have caused more problems than it solved. Part of the reason for animal testing is that there are not many alternatives. Whilst it is obviously cruel and pointless to subject animals to experiments, most
people
 would agree that it is worse to do
this
 to human beings.
However
, there needs to be some sort of procedure by which testing can move from theoretical to human trials without the need for the evils of animal testing. What
this
 process would be remains to be seen, but it is essential for any humane society. In conclusion,
people
 may argue that there are benefits that come from experimenting on animals, but in fact, there is no good reason to continue doing
this
. Scientists need to immediately seek an alternative and end
this
 barbaric and pointless practice.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific breakthroughs
  • ethical concerns
  • alternatives
  • animal testing
  • moral implications
  • ethical considerations
  • vivisection
  • research methods
  • ethical dilemmas
  • animal welfare
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