The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram below illustrates
procedure
Add an article
the procedure
a procedure
of
the production of instant noodles.
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for
Overall
, it consists 8
steps Change preposition
of 8
where
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which
it
started with flour Correct pronoun usage
apply
storing
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stored
into
the silos Change preposition
in
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and finish
finish
off by labelling and sealing the product.
In the first step, the flour is transported Correct subject-verb agreement
finishes
with
trucks and Change preposition
by
stores
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stored
into
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in
the
silos that had Correct article usage
apply
the
optimal storage condition which Correct article usage
apply
help
to extend the storage time. Flour is Change the verb form
helps
mix
with water and oil in the mixer and turn into dough sheets with Wrong verb form
mixed
help
of rollers. The machines slice the sheets into strips which Correct article usage
the help
is
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are
then
shaped into noodle discs.
The noodle discs undergo cooking in oil which have
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has
high
temperature. Add an article
a high
This
step can act as preservation as it help
to Change the verb form
helps
kills
microorganisms on top. After that, the noodle is dry Change the verb
kill
then
putting it one by one into cups. Vegetable and spices is add
Wrong verb form
added
into
the cup before labelling. The Change preposition
to
labeled
products will be Change the spelling
labelled
seal
in the meanwhile is ready to Wrong verb form
sealed
be sell
to any supermarket.Change the verb form
be sold
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