The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram below illustrates
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the production of instant noodles.
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, it consists
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steps
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it
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started with flour
storing
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the silos
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off by labelling and sealing the product. In the first step, the flour is transported
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trucks and
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into
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the
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silos that had
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optimal storage condition which
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to extend the storage time. Flour is
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with water and oil in the mixer and turn into dough sheets with
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of rollers. The machines slice the sheets into strips which
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then
shaped into noodle discs. The noodle discs undergo cooking in oil which
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high
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temperature.
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to
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microorganisms on top. After that, the noodle is dry
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putting it one by one into cups. Vegetable and spices is
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the cup before labelling. The
labeled
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products will be
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in the meanwhile is ready to
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to any supermarket.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufactured
  • ingredients
  • dough
  • rolled out
  • thin strips
  • steaming process
  • partially cooked
  • fried
  • dehydrating
  • packaged
  • distribution
  • quality control
  • standards
  • flavoring powder
  • sauce packet
  • traditional pasta
  • dehydration
  • instant cooking
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