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Some people believe that professionals such as doctors and engineers must work in the country where they were trained. Others think that they should have the right to work in another country if they wanted to. Discuss both of these points of view and express your own opinion.

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The admissibility of labour force
migration
 is a debatable topic in modern reality. Numerous scientists prefer to leave their
country
 to find a better offer abroad
instead
 of staying in a region that has given them knowledge and skills.
Such
 phenomenon can be explored from different sides and
this
 essay will put forward the arguments for both opinions and will provide a personal point of view. On the one hand, leaving your land when it demands specialists is not really fairly. Schools and universities were built for creating professionals who will develop their
country
 and use the received skills for the benefit of the community.
Thus
, the
migration
 of students just after graduating can considerably damage plenty of areas within the
country
.
For example
, the global moving of experts from Eastern Europe to America and Canada has provoked a set of negative consequences inside mentioned region
such
 as reduced productivity within the science sector and decreased number of IT masters.
On the other hand
, in ,reality where government should provide freedom for everyone there is no place for shaming
people
 for their attempts to find a better working place out of the
country
 where they were born. One of the main principles of freedom on a legislative level is unimpeded moving regardless of purposes, so
people
 can make their choice as they want and bullying should not be accepted in these cases.
Moreover
,
migration
 will be an indication for countries that they do not provide enough working places that would satisfy the needs of the population.
Thus
, governments will be able to change some of their approaches and keep the
people
 from moving. My opinion is based on arguments that were put forward and I tend to state that
migration
 is a normal reaction of specialists when the
country
 can not give stable working places and competitive salaries, so
instead
 of shaming
people
 who decided to reach career growth abroad, local authorities have to realise how to improve their territory to stop еру labour drain.
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