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Some think that hosting an international sporting event is beneficial for a country while others disagree (advantages / disadvantages)

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A number of
people
 are of the opinion that nations benefit from championing global athletic events,
however
, many other members of society disagree.
This
 essay will discuss both angles by providing supporting facts for either option.
Firstly
, hosting an international sporting event presents enormous economic opportunities for the host nation. Many
people
 from different countries typically troop into the
country
 focal
country
 and they usually come with a lot of money to spend on different things. Another advantage of
this
 is the cultural exchange that goes on. The focal
country
 has a good chance to showcase its culture and way of life to the many visitors. In essence, they put their region on the map by sponsoring
such
 big events.
However
, it is not all rosy as there are several disadvantages to
this
 as well. One of these is the spike in petty crimes.
Due to
 the increase in the number of
people
 in the
country
, law enforcement agents are often overwhelmed.
This
 creates an avenue for notorious
people
 to commit petty crimes
such
 as pickpocketing, stealing and in more severe cases, violence. Something else
that is
 seen as a downside is the amount of money that goes into the preparation and planning for
such
 an important activity. It is uncertain whether countries recoup the money spent. In conclusion, there are many arguments on both sides for why a nation will choose to champion a big athletic event. There are many considerations that should go into it. Government and private stakeholders,
as well as
 regular citizens, need to think through all the angles before they decide it is an activity they want to embark on.
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  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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