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The table shows the amount of spent on healthcare in different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and recording the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The table shows the amount of spent on healthcare in different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and recording the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
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The given table clearly illustrates the differences in the expenditure on healthcare
services
 in
Japan
, Italy, France, German, and the
USA
.
Overall
, the
USA
 has the highest total amount spent
whereas
Japan
 experiences the lowest one among the 5 countries.
Furthermore
, public spending is always higher than private ones in all countries.
To begin
 with, the
USA
 has the highest spending with a total of 14.3
GDP
.
Moreover
, the expense of private and public in the
USA
also
 are the highest ones with 8
GDP
 and 6.3
GDP
 respectively. Germany is the second country in the cost of healthcare
services
,
,
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 the highest public spending is in
this
 nation at 8.6 GP. France has a 2.1
GDP
 lower than the second country.
Japan
 spends the lowest amount of money on total and private health
services
 with 7.2 and 1.4
GDP
 respectively among all countries. The difference between
Japan
 and Italy is only 0.5 of
GDP
.
Furthermore
, the expenditure on public medical
services
 in Italy has the lowest amount with a 5.3
GDP
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words services, japan, usa, gdp with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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