The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat  in a European country between 1979 and 2004
The given graph illustrates the consumption of chicken,
beef
,
lamb
, and
fish
in a European country through the period 1979 to 2004 as a whole. The vertical axis shows the amount of consumption per gram and, the horizontal axis represents time. In detail, at the beginning,
beef
with more than 200
gr
per person, had the highest consumption among the others
while
fish
with about 50
gr
per person, scored the lowest. As time passed there had been a rise in chicken numbers,
however
,
beef
,
lamb
and,
fish
experienced a continuous decline through those years. Notable to mention that they didn't decrease in the same way
for example
, in the first years more people ate
beef
, but since 1989 a downward trend got started.
On the other hand
, there was a steady decrease in
lamb
from 150
gr
to around 50
gr
in those 31 years. What is more, the
fish
was more stable, and always recorded something about 50
gr
. In conclusion, the majority of people in a European country are willing to eat more chicken and less
beef
and
lamb
,
meanwhile
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they consume the same kilo grams of
fish
as they used to do.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words beef, lamb, fish, gr with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fish
  • meat
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • gradual
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady
  • correlation
  • period
  • data
  • comparison
  • predominant
  • kilograms per capita
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • sustainability
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