The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat  in a European country between 1979 and 2004
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The given graph illustrates the consumption of chicken,
beef
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,
lamb
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, and
fish
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in a European country through the period 1979 to 2004 as a whole. The vertical axis shows the amount of consumption per gram and, the horizontal axis represents time. In detail, at the beginning,
beef
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with more than 200
gr
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per person, had the highest consumption among the others
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fish
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with about 50
gr
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per person, scored the lowest. As time passed there had been a rise in chicken numbers,
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,
beef
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,
lamb
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and,
fish
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experienced a continuous decline through those years. Notable to mention that they didn't decrease in the same way
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, in the first years more people ate
beef
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, but since 1989 a downward trend got started.
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, there was a steady decrease in
lamb
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from 150
gr
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to around 50
gr
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in those 31 years. What is more, the
fish
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was more stable, and always recorded something about 50
gr
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. In conclusion, the majority of people in a European country are willing to eat more chicken and less
beef
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and
lamb
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,
meanwhile
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they consume the same kilo grams of
fish
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as they used to do.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words beef, lamb, fish, gr with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fish
  • meat
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • gradual
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady
  • correlation
  • period
  • data
  • comparison
  • predominant
  • kilograms per capita
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • sustainability
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