The table gives information about Underground Railroad networks in six big cities regarding when they were opened, the size and the number of users annually

The table gives information about Underground Railroad networks in six big cities regarding when they were opened, the size and the number of users annually
The table illustrates the opening and number of users for underground railway stations in enormous areas.
Overall
, it can be seen that London, Paris, Tokyo, Wahington DC, Kyoto and Los Angeles has a railway network.
Moreover
, Paris and Tokyo had the majority number of passengers.
To begin
with, the top three cities for train customers, Paris is the highest use of transport and the scheme was established in 1900.
Furthermore
, Tokyo
also
had the highest quantity of users for rails the road networks for railways were developed in 1927. Next, London is the first city to bring underground networks in 1863 and had 775 million users per year.
On the other hand
, Washington DC developed the underground construction project in 1976 and had
overall
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144 million humans travelling per year.
In addition
, Kyoto introduced the railway transport system in 1981 with the smallest route,
as well as
, having less passenger history.
However
, Los Angeles introduced the project in 2001, it
also
has small routes and less access to trains.
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