The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.

The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.
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The graph and bar chart are providing some data about the average highest and lowest daily
temperature
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during one
year
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.
in
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addition
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it illustrated the
rainfull
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rainfall
painful
rain full
daily average
on
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each month of the
year
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in two cities.
overall
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,
it is clear that
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the highest
temperature
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of
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both cities
occure
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occur
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the
begin
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of the
year
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and
the
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end of the
year
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. in
contract
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contrast
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, the lowest
teperature
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temperature
of
Brisband
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Brisbane
and
Canberra
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experienced
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on
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june
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June
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amd
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and
july
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July
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. and the average
rainfull
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rainfall
days
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for
Brisband
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Brisbane
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Canberra
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accounted for 14 and 10
days
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repectavily
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respectively
. the maximum
temperature
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for
Brisband
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Brisbane
was in
march
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March
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and accounted for 30 C. beside the highest
temperature
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for
Canberra
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witnessed some
flactuations
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fluctuations
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, it reached its peak
on
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december
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December
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by
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28C.
in
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contract
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contrast
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Camberra
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Canberra
hintted
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hinted
the lowest
temperature
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during the
year
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to reach 1C in
july
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July
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.
Brisabane
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Brisbane
witnessed
an
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steady
incresce
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increase
of
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rainfull
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rainfall
rain full
days
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durin
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during
the first three months of the
year
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to reach
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between 11 to 14
raining
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rainy
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day
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days
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a
momth
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month
. and it
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hinted
the lowest rainfall
days
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between
june
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June
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to
august
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August
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br 6
days
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every month.
Canberra
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witnessed a steady rainfall average
days
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all
the
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apply
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year
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to
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apply
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not
exceed
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exceeding
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10
days
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and not less than
one week
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one-week
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rainfall
amonth
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month
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, year, canberra, days with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average daily maximum
  • average daily minimum
  • rainfall
  • degrees Celsius (°C)
  • anomalies
  • trends
  • geographic location
  • climate zones
  • seasonal changes
  • data representation
  • comparison
  • temperature range
  • weather patterns
  • statistical analysis
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