The diagram below show some principles of house design for cool and for warm climates.

The diagram below show some principles of house design for cool and for warm

climates.
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The diagrams show how houses for cool and warm temperatures are made.
Overall
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it is clear that
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there are differences between buildings for cool and warm climates.
Firstly
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, we will pay attention to the principle of house design for a cool climate. The building material is special for heat storage, what we call insulation. The roof has a high-angled so that the sun could enter into the construction. Inside, there is a thermal building material to decrease heat loss.
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, we will focus on the principle of house design for warm climates. Contrary to the previous one, here we search to reflect the sun, for
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, we observe external insulation with a reflective roof material which overhangs for shade.
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, during the day, windows are closed and covered,
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, at night, windows are open for ventilation, thanks to that, the stored heat is removed and the temperature inside is lower.
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