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The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disgree with this statement?

#aim #science #people #lives #disgree
The development of advanced
science
 and
technology
 is the most crucial goal for
people
. I do not agree with
this
 view.
Although
 there are vital for individuals in society, there are
also
 considered about
animals
'
lives
 and environment. Live of
people
 should not be prioritised. On the one hand, the Advanced
technology
 of
science
 these days considered as a main impact on
people
's
lives
 because almost everything that can be seen involves
science
such
 as transportation and the Internet. If we lost these technologies, it made our
lives
 harder than ever before.
Firstly
, we may take more time to run errands or take the whole day to walk from one place to another place.
Secondly
, If we can not access the internet ,we might lose some information or can not explore enormous data as rapidly as today.
On the other hand
, not only Improving
science
 and
technology
 for citizens but
also
 need to offer to
animals
 and the environment. Nowadays,
people
 took advantage of environmental resources
such
 as the consumption of water and animal businesses. So authorities and individuals should be preserved and protect these from dangers and extinction.
For instance
, water that we use to consume should be provided clean by using
technology
.
Additionally
,
animals
 that we live together should be protected from dangers because they may help balance diversity in our world.
To sum up
, citizens'
lives
 are important to provide advanced
science
 tools, but should not be a priority as we have
animals
 and the environment needs to be protected. If we do not focus on it, it can be drawbacks for
this
 world.
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