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•It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is beer in the countryside. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Some people claim that living in an urban area is better
while
 others agree with the idea that the
coutrylife
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country life
countryside
 is
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preferable. Personally, I agree with both ideas and
this
 essay will discuss my point of view in the following paragraphs, including some examples from my own experience. To introduce, in
current
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 day scenario,
cities
 offer much better options to live
such
 as
,
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 employment, entertainment and self-development. In
other word
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, if
person
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a person
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 tends to grow, modern towns provide him with the best alternatives. To illustrate, Toronto as one of the most celebrated
cities
of
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 Canada, supports employees with
satisfactory
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 work environment,
as well as
 in that interurban workers find themselves as having
qualified
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 range of vision.
Secondly
, universities,
schools
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and schools
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 supply
community
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a community
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 acceptable education system and it opens new doors to the various sides of the world.
For instance
, doctors, IT specialists,
teachers
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and teachers
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 have been studying
in
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overseas for the
last
 two decades.
On the other hand
, those who prefer to live in the natural environment are right as well. There are some reasons to explain
this
 phenomenon. First and foremost, maybe adults
tied
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 with many tasks at work, so they would appreciate their retirement
in
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the
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far away from
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the crowdness
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crowdness
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crowds
crowdedness
 of
metropolis
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a metropolis
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, in the depth of
silent
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.
Furthermore
, prices
is
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 growing day by day and it makes life conditions more difficult. To exemplify, in
the
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previous years, just one member of
family
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the family
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 could earn enough salary and
met
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 all family's
expense
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expenses
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;
however
, today it seems impossible in great
cities
. It
also
 would be, humankind who lives in the village,
interested
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is interested
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 in nature and favour
healthy
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a healthy
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 lifestyle.
To conclude
, I opine that the choice of living place depends on personality. Everyone seeks out convenience and growth and both
cities
 and villages contribute them with
vary
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 alternatives.
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