With the development of social media, more and more youngsters are being allowed unsupervised access to the internet in order to meet and chat with friends which can lead to potentially dangerous situations. What solution can you suggest to deal with this problem?

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The rapid progress of social
media
enables faster
communications
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between people around the world. Among youngsters, social
media
,
for
example
, Facebook, Twitter,
Tiktok
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, is a part of their daily lives.
However
, there is
potential
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risk for teenagers to use
the
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social
media
freely. We have heard heartbreaking news of teenagers who were sexually abused or committed suicide after meeting friends on the
Internet
. Solutions to minimizing the potential danger will be discussed below. First of all, education is
the
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utmost importance in arousing
the
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awareness of the underlying risk
on
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social
media
in
the
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teenagers’ communities.
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example
, the government
is
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recommended inviting social influenzas to make videos or songs to promote the message of using
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social
media
wisely. By doing so, adolescents can become more alert
on
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suspicious social
accounts
.
While
it is impossible to restrict youngsters from all access to social applications, raising awareness is one of the ways to avoid tragedies associated with the
Internet
.
Secondly
, laws can be enacted to force all citizens
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their real names in registering all social
media
accounts
. It is a solution to deter criminals from using fake
accounts
to find teenage targets online.
For
example
, China has adopted
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registration on
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national social
media
,
for
example
, WeChat and Weibo.
This
makes the government easier to track illegal activities and potential threats on the
Internet
and
contribute
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to a safer environment across social platforms.
Although
youngsters are prone to various dangers involving socializing online, banning them from using social applications is unrealistic.
To conclude
, Education on underlying threats on social
media
is a possible solution to raise awareness in the community. At the same time, the government can impose
legislations
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legislation
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on existing social
media
accounts
. By using these methods, we hope our next generation is free from any crisis on the
Internet
.
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