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these dayes it is much easier for many people to travel to different countries for tourism than in the past. do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

#dayes #people #travel #countries #tourism #development
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todays
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 people lifestyle
traveling
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 is a
neccesity
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necessity
 so
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they go to different countries each year.
Moreover
, nowadays all the people around the world can visit even different continents easily and it is not a big deal. There are several advantages and disadvantages
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this
 development.
Firstly
, as the transportation system
grow
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grows
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, each person can buy a train or airplane ticket in order to travel easier and as fast as it can be in each holiday.
Furthermore
,
this
 adventurous experience leads people to be
in different
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indifferent
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 and difficult situations and get out of their comfort zone to relax and release their
mind
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 after
the
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a
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 hard-working period.
In addition
, every
cities
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city
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 have many tourist attraction which can
provid
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provide
a
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good
bussines
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business
 for the local communities there.
For example
, Shiraz has the best tourist attractions in Iran.
Although
, it is an industrial city
but
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tourists have made a big
bussines
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business
 for restaurants and traditional markets in our city.
Additionally
,
this
make
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 a perfect opportunity to expand and teach other about our culture and share our amazing dishes.
On the other hand
, the population grow faster than a blink and the consumption of fossil oil for transportation and water crisis in different cities are unbelievable.
Although
, tourists have a lot of advantages
but
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the disadvantages like
plluted
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polluted
 air which is the result of
a
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the
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 use of cars, trains, subways and so on. They emitted carbon dioxide and
has
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 made health diseases.
Moreover
, tourists may not behave
atically
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atomically
ethically
 in nature so
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they might harm the environment of the destination. For
instant
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, they litter in forests and beaches or they may write or touch the ancient status and destroy them all. In conclusion, despite it is much easier than
befor
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before
 to travel to different cities for tourism. I think the disadvantages overcome the advantages in many points.
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