The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

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The given diagram highlights information about the floor schedule of a communal library twenty years ago and its present design.

Overall

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, it can be seen that free services are given to readers by special gadgets and

also

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room

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on the northwest has been expanded

along with

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the

room

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on the southeast which its

rounded

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a rounded

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corner making way for an entry door. Looking at the details, Tables,

as well as

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Chairs have been removed from the centre. Followingly, the place of Adult non-fiction

books

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has been inverted into a fiction

books

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area

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; just bottom of them, an information desk is added with self-service machines nearby. Oppositely, All reference

books

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have taken place.

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, on the northeast corner, the children's

books

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area has turned into a lecture

room

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;

moreover

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, the left-above

room

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is the only

room

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which has been expanded ;

sofas

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, storytelling events and children's fiction

books

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. What's more, the reading

room

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has been replaced with a computer

room

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and its door

also

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now is paralleled with an Entrance.

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, the Enquiry desk on the southeast has been redeveloped into a Cafe.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words room, books with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

184 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

floor plan
layout
shelving
reading area
reference section
encyclopedias
dictionaries
circulation desk
transactions
digital media
computer stations
multimedia rooms
café area
social environment
leisure-friendly
expanded reading areas
user experience
comfortable seating
children's section
engage younger readers

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Many believe that learning a language at an early age is better while others think such language should be taught later. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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