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Some students take a gap year after graduating high school to work and/or travel. Discus the advantages and disadvantages.

#students #gap #year #school #work #travel #discus
now days
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,
education
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purpose
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the
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life because can not become
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anything
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wotout
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without
education
 .but some students take a
gap
 during in educational era.Many
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people
peopl
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people
 agree
that is
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good
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a goot
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goot
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good decision
desicion
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decision
 but some are not,now I will discuss the argument of people in
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 paragraph .first of all,some
student
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students
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 take
gap
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a gap
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during
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in
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education
due to
reponsbiltied
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 or they can not afford
expenses
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the expenses
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 of
education
they
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because they
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 do not have
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the envestment
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envestment
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investment
investments
 that spend on
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the study
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study
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studies
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.
Thats
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 why they take
gap
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a gap
the gap
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 and
doing
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do
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 work.
An
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 other
hanf
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hand
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family
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the family
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 that do work for
carring
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carrying
caring
cercat
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circuit
 their family as
usuall
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usual
usually
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our
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pakistan
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 one person take all
resposibilty
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responsibility
 of other take rest. people blive that it is wrong way
every one
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 should take
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a step
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step
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steps
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 to perform
theor
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their
 reponsbolties
while
student
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a student
the student
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 can carry their
study
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studies
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. As
such
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student
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students
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 take
gap
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the gap
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 for travel because they feel
bore
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bored
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of
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with
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 educational life that way they want to take
gap
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the gap
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 and
vist
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visit
to
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apply
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historical
place
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places
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,
miusum
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museum
 and
to
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see that natural scenery that
the
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 gift of god.
i
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 think they
wast
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waste
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of
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time and money .when
student
take
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takes
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gap
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a gap
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 they lose
thair
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their
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canstrait
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constraint
can strait
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other
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they
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dont
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don't
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agian
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again
as
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like
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before.
Due to
 people
disgree
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disagree
 that
desicion
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decision
 of
stdents
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students
.
Conculion
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Conclusion
,
young
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the young
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 generation
want
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wants
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 to
chil
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child
 and
do
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does
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 not focus on
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the study
a study
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study
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studying
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 the
most
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time
and
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due to
convert
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converting
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on
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to
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ther
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other
 things but another hand I accepted the situation of
poor
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a poor
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 family that can not carry on
education
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with education
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 due lot of expenses,
that is
 the major point of
gap
.
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