In today’s competitive world many families find it necessary for both parents go out to work while some say that children in these families benefit from additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents absence ?Do you agree or disagree?

The fierce competition in current society makes a significant number of
families
consider full-time
working
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to secure more resources for their kids.
Such
decision
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has both benefits and drawbacks
on
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their children’s development. Personally, I agree
to
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the opinion that the extra income from working
parents
is beneficial to their children’s academically.
However
, absent
parents
are not good for youngsters because of the lack of
support
emotionally.
To begin
with, I
support
that children can have advantages
on
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their academic performance with the additional income from their working
parents
. With more resources to be spent on employing tutors and interest classes, youngsters can have a competitive advantage over their peers.
For example
, a recent survey revealed that working
parents
in Hong Kong spent around $5000 per month on tutor classes and extra-curricular activities. As both academic results and achievements in extra-curricular activities will be taken
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consideration when admitting to a good university, a child in these
families
is more likely to have a better prospect
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academic achievement.
Secondly
, I agree that one of the drawbacks of working
parents
families
is that children cannot receive enough emotional
support
from their
parents
.
For example
,
parents
from rural China choose to work in cities and left their kids behind at home.
Due to
separation,
a
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numerous
of
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adolescents do not have a good relationship with
parents
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and are prone to emotional problems.
Parents
’ emotional
support
and communication are essential to fostering a harmonious family. It plays a crucial role in children’s mental health. It is undeniable that
parents
have made significant
effort
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to provide a good environment for
their
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next generation.
To conclude
, in my opinion, youngsters raised in
working parent
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families
can have access to better resources but they may have less emotional
support
from their
parents
. I hope
parents
can try their best in balancing the pros and cons of being working fathers and mothers.
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