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The flow chart shows 'trampling', the negative effect of tourists walking in the countryside for the environment. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

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The flow chart shows 'trampling', the negative effect of tourists walking in the countryside for the environment. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
The flow charts
shows
Correct subject-verb agreement
show
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 the negative effect of tourists walking in the countryside
for
Change preposition
on
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 the environment. By the
scheme
Add a comma
scheme,
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 we can see two consequences after people
trampling
Wrong verb form
trample
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 the grass. First of all, vegetation is damaged
Linking Words
then
Correct word choice
when
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 humans
walking
Wrong verb form
walk
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 in the area. After that
follows
Correct subject-verb agreement
follow
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 2 problems. It starts with the fact that plants become weaker,and ends up
that
Change preposition
with
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 plants
do
Verb problem
apply
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not
reduce and grow
Wrong verb form
growing
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, all
that
Correct pronoun usage
of which
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 leads to
reducing
Replace the word
reduced
 vegetation.
Unfortunately
Add a comma
Unfortunately,
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 after
that is
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 erosion and decreased quality of
soil
Use synonyms
 and plants. The second way,which is shown at flow chart after humans feet
steads
Wrong verb form
stand
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 on the
grass
Punctuation problem
grass,
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 is that
Use synonyms
soil
Correct article usage
the soil
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 compacted becomes hard underfoot. The main problem
of
Change preposition
with
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this
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 is that
air
Correct article usage
the air
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 and water quality in the
soil
Use synonyms
 is reduced. It
increase
Correct subject-verb agreement
increases
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 erosion or water runs off the land and
also
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 deteriorates products.
Overall
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,
diagram
Correct article usage
the diagram
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 shows that in all ways, the trampling has
negative
Correct article usage
a negative
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 effect on the environment. And in all cases it leads to one
-
Punctuation problem
apply
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 bad quality of
soil
Use synonyms
.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words soil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduce" was used 2 times.
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