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Technology is becoming increasingly prevalent in the modern world. Given time, technology will completely replace the teacher in the classroom. Analyse both sides of this argument.

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Technology has gained popularity in recent years, especially in education. Some argue that it will soon remove teachers thanks to its efficiency,
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 many others believe that
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 reality won'
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 occur because the interpersonal skills of humans are dispensable. On the one hand, utilizing the internet and artificial intelligence have been regarded as the most effective ways of learning. Students can search for literally every piece of knowledge they need through online search engines and language models, which are proven to significantly boost our productivity and
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 way cheaper than taking courses provided by people.
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, the advent of Chat-GPT has revolutionized the way we learn when we can prompt it and receive the answer whenever we are stuck on a brain-scratching question.
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, machines couldn'
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 understand human-being better than us.
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 with humans, electric devices don'
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 know how we feel, so they aren'
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 able to proactively engage us in their lessons.
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, during the learning process, students may find themselves in mental issues, leading to unexpected academic results. In
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 cases, they will desperately need compassion and help from their teachers, which technical advancement still fails to offer.
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, in Vietnam, young children with disability in perception must join special classes stood by professionals to rehabilitate, rather than being treated by technological methods. To summarize,
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 some opine that innovations will inevitably replace traditional teaching methods
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 their effectiveness, others disagree with it since we still teach really well with our sociability.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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