Some people believe that children of all ages should have extra responsibilities (for example, helping at home or at work). Others believe that, outside of school, children should be free to enjoy life. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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an argument about whether
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be given or not. Some people contend that
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, regardless of age, should be given additional duties even outside of
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others argue that kids had better enjoy their lives without any obligations, except for in
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. I advocate the view that the former thought is accurate, though it should naturally not be taken to extremes. Regarding the latter view of
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endure long studying hours at
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join extra classes before completing their volume of assignments both from a state
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and additional classes. If make offspring to
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in charge of home duties
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as cooking, washing the dishes, tidying their homes, etc, it would place
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overwhelming pressure on their shoulders.
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, by unwisely using time-management
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would exert a big influence on
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's academic performances,
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, more and more bad marks have appeared in lieu of flying colour scores. In spite of the above arguments, I am inclined to think that increased responsibility encourages greater maturity and self-reliance and
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benefit from numerous life
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, time-management
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, decision-making
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, critical thinking
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, etc. More importantly, if parents give their heirs responsibilities to do
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as either making them do household chores or making them a job which is utmostly related to their personalities can lead to instil the truth that in reality they have
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abundance of obligations and their lessons should not be an excuse to shirk their duties toward doing them.
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but not least,
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not only have opportunities to strengthen their characteristics but
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opt for a suitable career with more information in future.
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, even though critics of
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an approach maintain that it can overburden young
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, in my view, it is advisable to have logical limits to the amount of work that
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should do to enhance their sense of responsibility.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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