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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
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The bar chart illustrates
about
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how families distributed their weekly
earning
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 in one country in 1968 and 2018.
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, it is clear to see that
the
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food had decreased dramatically over the given period,
whereas
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spending
in
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 housing and leisure showed
significant
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increased
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. To probe more deeply, in 1968 the families' expenditure of the most money was food
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was about 35
percent
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per cent
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 and in 2018 declined
over
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a
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half approximately 17
percnet
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per cent
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, the percentage of housing and leisure that had an upward trend from 1968 to 2018, climbed from 10% to 18% and 8% to 23% and
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transport was 8% in 1968, rising to 14% in 2018.
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, the proportion of clothing and
footware
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footwear
 that were had a half drop from 10% to 5%, and the fuel and power had a slightly declined from 7% to 4%,
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however
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 the household that bought goods were equally common.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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