It is generally believed that some people are born with talents, for instance sport or music, and others are not. however, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sport person. discuss both these views and give your opinion.

It cannot be denied that
talents
play a significant role in becoming a professional dancer or musician.
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other people argue that
children
's training would be an option. I believe
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some extent that everything will be
achieavable
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achievable
by
children
's teaching and coaching. On the one hand, some people claim that
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of
children
are born with great
talents
in some fields. First of all, gifted
children
are
genious
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genius
in their nature. They would make a success without any
encouragements
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and positive
feedbacks
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.
For instance
, no one
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become Ronaldo in the world of football.
Although
, he had faced numerous obstacles yet his great
talents
assisted him to become a famous football player. Second of all, the role of gene heritage cannot be ignored. Researchers have indicated that
talents
are coded in our genes
such
as our personality features or physical appearance.
Therefore
, they have been handed through relatives.
On the other hand
, there are people who suppose that educating
children
is the best approach to
foster
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skills.
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of teachers have declared that schools have crucial impacts
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children
's learning. Teaching various concepts through
education
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system
improve
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children
's knowledge. Take a wealthy kid as an example, participating in piano classes
give
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them the opportunity to become a pianist.
Furthermore
, history
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had many examples of politicians who had been taught in universities to be
rullers
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rulers
of countries with no background in the past. In conclusion, from where I stand, not only beneficial would be having certain
talents
, but
also
taking part in courses related to what they desire to learn is essential as well.
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