The graph below shows the average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, countries that have adopted a global approach to business and countries that have not.
The bar chart
illustrate
the average Change the verb form
illustrates
increase
in GDP
in rich countries
where global
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the global
approach
has been adapted
. Correct your spelling
adopted
Countries
with global
Add an article
a global
approach
to business and countries
that have not.Globalisers
had the biggest growth
in GDP
. Wealthy countries
experienced the biggest decrease and also
globalisers
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globalised
experinced
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experienced
experience
significant
decrease Correct article usage
a significant
while
growth
rates of Correct article usage
the growth
non-
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non-globalised
globalisers
fluctuated to 2% from 1960 to 1990.
In the first decade, namely in 1960s
wealthy Correct article usage
the 1960s
countries
had the biggest growth
rate
almost 5%.While
globalisers
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globalised
experinced
the smallest Correct your spelling
experienced
growth
rate
to
2% Change preposition
of
This
rate
was approximately 1.5% developing countries
adopting a global approach
to business.When it comes to non-
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non-globalised
globalisers
they
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the
growth
rate
was to
2% During the next decade the percentage of Change preposition
apply
GDP
growth
in wealthy countries
decrease significantly just below to
2%. Change preposition
apply
Whereas
this
rate
increase
in other countries
that have a global approach
.
In 1980s
the Change the article
the 1980s
growth
of GDP
in wealthy countries
went on declining and by 1990 had decreased to 2%. Globalisers
experinced
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experienced
experience
slight
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a slight
increase
in 1980 to 3%. While
non-globalisers
increased significantly in 1980 in GDP
growth
. By the end of the period
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,period
globalisers
had the biggest Correct your spelling
globalists
increase
in GPD
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GDP
growth
reaching 5%.Submitted by islomov1229 on
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