The graph below shows the average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, countries that have adopted a global approach to business and countries that have not.

The graph below shows the average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, countries that have adopted a global approach to business and countries that have not.
The bar chart
illustrate
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the average
increase
in
GDP
in rich
countries
where
global
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the global
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approach
has been
adapted
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adopted
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.
Countries
with
global
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a global
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approach
to business and
countries
that have not.
Globalisers
had the biggest
growth
in
GDP
. Wealthy
countries
experienced the biggest decrease and
also
globalisers
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globalised
experinced
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experienced
experience
significant
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decrease
while
growth
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the growth
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rates of
non-
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non-globalised
globalisers
fluctuated to 2% from 1960 to 1990. In the first decade, namely in
1960s
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the 1960s
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wealthy
countries
had the biggest
growth
rate
almost 5%.
While
globalisers
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globalised
experinced
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experienced
the smallest
growth
rate
to
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2%
This
rate
was approximately 1.5% developing
countries
adopting a global
approach
to business.When it comes to
non-
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non-globalised
globalisers
they
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growth
rate
was
to
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2% During the next decade the percentage of
GDP
growth
in wealthy
countries
decrease significantly just below
to
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2%.
Whereas
this
rate
increase
in other
countries
that have a global
approach
. In
1980s
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the
growth
of
GDP
in wealthy
countries
went on declining and by 1990 had decreased to 2%.
Globalisers
experinced
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experienced
experience
slight
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a slight
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increase
in 1980 to 3%.
While
non-
globalisers
increased significantly in 1980 in
GDP
growth
. By the end of the
period
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globalisers
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globalists
had the biggest
increase
in
GPD
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GDP
growth
reaching 5%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words increase, gdp, countries, approach, globalisers, growth, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 9 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trends
  • affluent nations
  • global business orientation
  • sustained growth
  • investment in technology
  • skilled labor
  • fluctuations
  • global trade
  • vulnerability
  • global market shifts
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • reliance on local markets
  • limited exposure
  • economic downturns
  • implications
  • economic policies
  • strategies
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