Some people believe that violence in the media, such as in television programs and films, directly results in violent behaviour. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The majority of folks think that the main factor of

violent

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act

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affect

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strong

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sense program

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show

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on the media

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platform

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, some

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individuals

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may argue that the violent

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can not build up a

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culprit

, there are many factors

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that develope

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develope

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develop

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personality

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. In my opinion, I

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strongly

agree with the rather viewpoint.

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the reasonable conclusion On the one hand, In the modern world, there are

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happen

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that happen

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everysingle

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every single

day, that

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because

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the influence

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the

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. That means

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Folks can not say that violent

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is the main issue changes

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pesonality

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personality

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personality,

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a lot of

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to affect

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action.

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, environment, background, Financial status and so on.

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the

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violent behaviour

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by many

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real-life

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factors not only watched the

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sense

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of the killer killed someone because they are following the scary

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. That

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they have been watching

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kind of

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movies

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for

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time.

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, they absorb

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become their

reallife

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reality

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cold case

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become

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becomes

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a popular

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for

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serial killer because they

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a lot of

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to hide the

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from the polices. In conclusion, I can

denying

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that violent

behavioue

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behaviour

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either

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violent

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movies

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or TV shows because not everyone watched the shows

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then

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and then

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make a

ciminal

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criminal

as there are heaps of other factors

influence

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that influence

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one to

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become a demerit person.

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

269 words

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Your opinion

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