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the top priority of business is making money , and they do not need to have social responsibilities.To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#priority #business #money #responsibilities
it is often said that the highest priority of
business
 is making
money
,
the
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apply
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social responsibility is not necessary for them. The writer does not agree with the reason and explain it flowing the statement On the
one
 hand, making
money
 is
one
 of the important goals of
business
 beside that they have responsibilities
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that is
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is
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are
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also
 the priority
such
 as income tax, doing charity, the percentage of jobless and more activity. Doing social responsibilities is very important because it is
one
 of the
reason
Change to a plural noun
reasons
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 that increases the income for
business
. In contrast, some people who do not agree maybe can use their responsibilities as
the
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a
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 reason to make
business
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businesses
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 pay
money
 for charity but that
money
 do not spend on really poor people. It can prevent the company from working which affects income. All in all the benefit of social responsibility is
one
 of the most important things that the company need pay attention to because it can improve the fame and fortune of that company.
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