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Band 2.5

the top priority of business is making money , and they do not need to have social responsibilities.To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#priority #business #money #responsibilities
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it is often said that the highest priority of
business
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 is making
money
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,
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social responsibility is not necessary for them. The writer does not agree with the reason and explain it flowing the statement On the
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 hand, making
money
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 is
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 of the important goals of
business
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 beside that they have responsibilities
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is
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 the priority
such
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 as income tax, doing charity, the percentage of jobless and more activity. Doing social responsibilities is very important because it is
one
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 of the
reason
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 that increases the income for
business
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. In contrast, some people who do not agree maybe can use their responsibilities as
the
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 reason to make
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business
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businesses
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 pay
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 for charity but that
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 do not spend on really poor people. It can prevent the company from working which affects income. All in all the benefit of social responsibility is
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 of the most important things that the company need pay attention to because it can improve the fame and fortune of that company.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Corporate social responsibility (CSR)
  • Profitability
  • Ethical practices
  • Economic growth
  • Brand image
  • Consumer backlash
  • Long-term success
  • Sustainability
  • Ethical labor practices
  • Community involvement
  • Legal requirements
  • Compliance policies
  • Innovation
  • Stakeholders
  • Social welfare
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