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The supplied map gives data on the developments that were at the seaside resort of Templeton from 1990 to 2005

The supplied map gives data on the developments that were at the seaside resort of Templeton from 1990 to 2005
the given map illustrates the transformation the seaside resort of
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 witnessed between 1990 and 2005.
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, the resort underwent 6 major changes over the years. in 1990, the layout of the place had a railway station in the east, which later extended all the way to the southwest side in 2005. the second shift in the scenario is the establishment of a ferry on the sealine.
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, forests and buildings were removed in order to construct a factory near the station. across the factory, on the southwestern side, new buildings were seen
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 of housing. right in front of those buildings, a new supermarket was built.
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, on the list is the demolishment of old properties in order to make new properties on the west side, in front of the supermarket, and around the hospital area in the northeast.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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